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I've listed this article for peer review because it is a former FA candidate and I would like to see it reach FA status as soon as possible. I know there is some work to be done on the article, such as expanding the legacy section, reception and possibly creation of the film, as it's one of the most important horror films of all time. I am also open to any other suggestions for improving this article.

Thanks, EclipseSSD (talk) 17:20, 15 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Ruhrfisch comments: Very briefly, here are some suggestions for improvement.

The lead should be an accessible and inviting overview of the whole article. Nothing important should be in the lead only - since it is a summary, it should all be repeated in the body of the article itself but the filming temperatures are only in the lead. My rule of thumb is to include every header in the lead in some way. Please see WP:LEAD
References need work - they should follow punctuation (no space) so fix things like The low speed 16 mm film required four times more light than modern cameras. [3] The refs should be in numerical order, so fix things like ... due to the violent nature of the video game and sold poorly because many game stores refused to carry it.[62][60]
Avoid direct external links in the text - convert to refs (the two block quotes)
Internet refs need URL, title, author if known, publisher and date accessed. {{cite web}} and other cite templates may be helpful. So fix things like current ref 13 which is now just "Gunnar Hansen FAQ". Retrieved on August 21, 2008." and needs a publisher - also what makes this a Reliable source? See WP:CITE and WP:V
Look at some film FAs and use them as a model for ideas and examples to follow. I think this needs a copyedit to polish the prose.
Since this has had a FAC, look at that as a very detailed peer review and double check that all issues raised there have been addressed. Treat examples cited as just that (examples) and check that there are not more such problems. If you think everything is fixed, ask some of the FAC reviewers to please take a second look at the article.

Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). Yours, Ruhrfisch _><>°^° 20:54, 28 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]