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I've listed this article for peer review because I would like to take this to Featured status prior to September in the hope that it could be featured on the front page on the 50th anniversary of the episode's first broadcast (and the first broadcast of Star Trek in general). Failing that, we already have a backup episode at FA already, but this would be the perfect choice. I've attempted to base it on "Space Seed" (the episode already at FA), but it could still do with some pointers to make the FA process smoother. Thanks, Miyagawa (talk) 11:41, 31 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Z105space edit

General
  • All images should have alt text per WP:ALT.
  • Added. BTW, thanks for reviewing, it's much appreciated. Miyagawa (talk) 17:00, 4 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Writing
  • "They gradually become so subtle that the crew have difficulty telling the difference between them and reality." - change have to had.
  • "that death would be likely quickly afterwards". - afterward.
  • "Roddenberry felt that Johnson's treatment was wrong, but did not want to lose him entirely As such, Rodenberry switched "The Man Trap" writing duties to him." You're missing a full stop between the words "entirely" & "As such"
  • "the same plot device has already appeared in pilot episode "The Cage"." - "has" should be spelt "had"; the word "the" should be inserted between "in" & "pilot".
Guest appearances
  • "the actress had previous guest starred in Perry Mason" - typo (should be spelt "previously")
Direction and filming
  • Delink salt shakers since it is linked in the plot subsection.
The creature
  • Monster of the week is an soft redirect to the Wikitonary page Villain of the week.
  • "The head of the costume were first sculpted in clay and then covered in a plaster cast." - was
Overseas broadcasts and re-releases
  • "with "The Man Trap" shown nearly three months afterwards on October 4 as the 13th episode." - afterward.
Critical reception
  • "as the crewmen who died in "The Man Trap" didn't wear red shirts," - did not.
  • I thought I'd managed to get out of that habit. Fixed now. Miyagawa (talk) 17:00, 4 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]
References
  • Can refs 14, 26, 29, 34, 37, 47, 48, 49, 50, 51 & 55 be archived in case those links become dead?
  • Thanks to David Fuchs, the rest of the citations are now archived. Miyagawa (talk) 21:53, 3 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]
  • You should say that ref 60 was found via HighBeam Research.

I probably have another look and will notify you if anything else stands out. Z105space (talk) 16:31, 4 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@Z105space: I just wanted to double check, did you have any further comments? I only ask as I'm aiming to nominate this at FAC as soon as the PR is closed. Thanks for all your previous comments, btw, they've been really helpful. Miyagawa (talk) 10:33, 12 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]
@Miyagawa: I have no further comments regarding the article. Z105space (talk) 12:00, 12 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]
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