Wikipedia:Peer review/Sydney Swans/archive1

Sydney Swans edit

Aussie Rules rocks, and the Swans rock even harder. If the Arsenal FC can get their article into FA status, then we Swannies ought to try for it too. Take a shot... J L C Leung 10:59, 28 October 2005 (UTC)[reply]

It needs a references section and an improvement to the lead paragraph, two lead paragraphs would do better for this article. It also seems to be lacking context, and I can see a lot of red links. A lot of the article is taken up by a large table listing Honor Roll. The history section is missing quite a bit of info, what happened in the 20s, 40s, 50s, 60s, 70s ? In the third paragraph of the History section, in the first line, it says On 31 July 1985, for what was thought to be $6.3 million, Dr Geoffrey Edelsten "bought" the Swans... Can you clarify the amount, and why is bought in apostrophes? Did he buy it or do something else? — Wackymacs 14:43, 28 October 2005 (UTC)[reply]