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I've listed this article for peer review because I believe that I have significantly improved this article to a good standard (not FA, but still pretty good) and I'd like to know where I can improve this article, what's good and what's bad in the article, and also what grade it is.

Thanks, Sims2aholic8 (Michael) (talk) 22:17, 15 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

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Ruhrfisch comments: Very briefly, here are some suggestions for improvement. I will admit that I know very little about Eurovision.

Is there a reason why there is not an image in the upper right corner (presumably above the infobox)? Is there any way to add an image to the infobox?
The lead should be expanded per WP:LEAD. My rule of thumb is to include every header in the lead in some way.
This needs a ref: Promoting his song, Meneguzzi later went on a Eurovision TV special on Maltese television in April 2008. My rule of thumb is that every quote, every statistic, every extraordinary claim and every paragraph needs a ref.
There are some short (one or two sentence) paragraphs which should be combined with others or perhaps expanded to improve the flow of the article.
I think it might help to provide more context to the reader - see WP:PCR. For example, a sentence or two on the Eurovision contest would help, or explaining in more detail the history of how the I Swiss pick their song and performer.
I think it could be made clearer that the singer is an Italian speaking Swiss citizen - I was confused at first and thought he was an Italian citizen.

Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). Yours, Ruhrfisch _><>°^° 01:43, 29 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]