Wikipedia:Peer review/Sun Yat-sen/archive1

Sun Yat-sen edit

The editors of this page are seeking more input and efforts into this article before it's submitted to FAC. Deryck C. 07:35, 19 August 2005 (UTC)[reply]

Some of the section headings need to be translated into better English (e.g. Way to Northern Expedition and Death); they should also use lower case initial letters after the first word. The hotel explanation for his Japanese name is intriguing, but isn't a connection with his birthplace more likely? Mark1 07:53, 19 August 2005 (UTC)[reply]
Mark, you may have inverted the logical pattern. Sun's birthplace's current name Zhongshan was named AFTER Sun, therefore it's impossible to say that his Japanese name came from his birthplace. Deryck C. 11:58, 20 August 2005 (UTC)[reply]
Some sections are just to tiny to be sections. Expand or merge the tiny one sentence sections like 'Sun as saint in Vietnam' or 'Other aliases'. --Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus Talk 17:35, 21 August 2005 (UTC)[reply]
  • Wow, great job with the article, Deryck. I'm sorry I couldn't have contributed more than just the earlier part of the article. My concern, other than the very short sections brought up above is the "names" section. i'm afraid it may hurt our chances of getting the FA- it's ridiculously long. Most chinese biographies don't have such a long names section- compare Mao Zedong for example. Borisblue 02:54, 22 August 2005 (UTC)[reply]