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I've listed this article for peer review because I want the strengths and weaknesses noted, to focus efforts for improvement.

Thanks, Bettering the Wiki (talk) 00:37, 31 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Ruhrfisch comments: Here are some suggestions for improvement. If you want more comments, please ask here. Interesting article, but needs some work to get it to GA standards.

A major problem is that the article needs many more references, for example the whole Authentication and logon section has no refs. There are also lots of paragraphs without refs. My rule of thumb is that every quote, every statistic, every extraordinary claim and every paragraph needs a ref.
I saw at least one internal link in the article - convert these to inline citations. Many of the current internet refs need URL, title, author if known, publisher and date accessed. {{cite web}} and other cite templates may be helpful. See WP:CITE and WP:V
The lead should be an accessible and inviting overview of the whole article and nothing important should be in the lead only - since it is a summary, it should all be repeated in the body of the article itself. My rule of thumb is to include every header in the lead in some way - as it is the article may need fewer sections / header too. Please see WP:LEAD
Lots of listy stuff that needs to be converted to prose
Watch for jargon - reduce or explain wherever possible - see WP:JARGON
The article is currently just a description of the features - there is almost no history of the development of the new features and there is no critical reaction to them either - what do the trade magazines say about these? Given the generally poor recation to Vista, I am guessing at least some of these have been criticized negatively.

Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). Yours, Ruhrfisch _><>°^° 01:08, 5 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]