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I've listed this article for peer review because I have made several major changes to the article since it passed its GA nomination, and I would like to make sure that the article is still up to standards.

Also, I would like to know if this article has any chance of making it to FA status. If so, what changes/improvements should be made before I consider an FA nomination.

Thanks, Davejohnsan (talk) 18:29, 28 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

  • Three paras in the lead for an article of this brevity is too much. See WP:LEAD.
  Done. Davejohnsan (talk) 04:22, 6 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • Where do I find out it's the 273rd episode?
If there were a specific field in infobox for overall episode number, I'd love to use it. However, the only way is to go to Law & Order: Special Victims Unit (season 13). Davejohnsan (talk) 19:53, 5 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • "the aftermath of the squad room shooting." I don't understand the wikiilnk here.
It's to give readers context without explicitly mentioning that it was from the twelfth season finale. Davejohnsan (talk) 19:50, 5 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • " by 7.63 viewers and received a 2.4/6% share" not many viewers (!) and I don't understand what 2.4/6% share means.
Will elaborate on this. Davejohnsan (talk) 19:53, 5 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • Infobox - is "Medical Examiner" really capitalised like that?
Yes, it's a job title and should be capitalized as a proper noun. Davejohnsan (talk) 19:50, 5 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • You could probably get away with linking "previous season premiere".
The only problem with this is that there's currently no article for that episode. Davejohnsan (talk) 19:50, 5 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • "A hotel maid,..." don't need "A " here.
  Done. Davejohnsan (talk) 03:18, 6 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • "his DNA matches the DNA recovered" rephrase so you don't repeat DNA so quickly.
  Done, but let me know if the rephrased version needs improvement. Davejohnsan (talk) 03:18, 6 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • Production section, first para is two short sentences, can you merge this or expand it, it's rather odd-looking!
  Done. Davejohnsan (talk) 03:33, 6 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • "French presidential election" link the relevant article.
  Done. Davejohnsan (talk) 04:10, 6 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • "most watched" hyphenate.
  Done. Davejohnsan (talk) 04:10, 6 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • Last external link could use en-dashes rather than spaced hyphens.
Are you also suggesting that the en-dashes not be spaced? Davejohnsan (talk) 04:12, 6 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]
No I'm not. The Rambling Man (talk) 07:52, 13 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Done. Davejohnsan (talk) 16:57, 14 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]

The Rambling Man (talk) 19:02, 4 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]

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