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I've listed this article for peer review because I have been working on this article and have seen it improved a lot since I have started it. Grammar & spelling mistakes have been fixed and the article is not too long and not too short. I am aware that it is quite impossible for a school article to achieve FA status, but I plan to bring this article to GA, or at least B. I want to know what are the things I have left out, and what can be done to improve this article, before I nominate it for GA.

Thanks, Kristalyamaki (talk) 15:41, 8 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Review from Five Years edit

Here are some suggestions for the article:

The lead doesnt summarise the article, it makes no mention of the facilities, achievements etc.
The section entitled "school fees" should be changed to "fees".
The school fees section is unreferenced. The POV that students at Tshung Tsin are rich spiled brats needs to be removed.
There is little mention of Academics in the article, which is worth of a heading. The heading should contain information on academic achievements.
The "success & Achievements" section is unsightly and should be removed with information merged into other sections as appropriate.
The facilities section should be changed to Campus.
The campus section should include information on the size of the campus, any notable buildings, features or ovals located on it.
There is little information about Extracurricular activities at the school, eg. sports, debating, the arts, music. Each of these needs a sub-heading.
The Annual events section should be removed. Any salvageable information should be moved into the Extracurricular activities section.
The administration section should be removed. A list of former principals of the school would be a good replacement.
The annual events section should be removed, it is of little encyclopedic use to anyone outside the school. What information is salvageable

If you have any questions on this review, or need more feedback on the article, please feel free to leave a note on my talk page. Thanks. Five Years 17:08, 14 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Ruhrfisch comment you say it is impossible to get a school article to FA, but there are two high school FAs that may be useful models: Stuyvesant High School and Plano Senior High School. Hoe this helps, Ruhrfisch _><>°^° 18:23, 14 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]