Wikipedia:Peer review/Ruth Kelly/archive1

Ruth Kelly edit

This is currently a GA. I'm looking for any comments anyone may have, with the long-term aim of getting this to FA status. SP-KP 18:23, 10 August 2007 (UTC)[reply]

I saw this peer review list at Project Gender studies. Anyway I think its generally very good, I have a few suggestions though.
  1. The second paragraph in Children's schooling seems unnecessary to me - only the line about the special needs schools near her home is important.
  2. The Career as an MP section could do with more sourcing.
  3. The sub-section Sex offenders in schools controversy is interesting & well sourced but not entirely relevant - what did Ruth Kelly say/do/promise about this issue? Similiarly the Trust schools section seems a bit long to me.
Over all the article reads well and is interesting, well done--Cailil talk 19:34, 10 August 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Just a smattering of points:
The initial section under the "Background" lacks sources
The "Family history" seems a bit out of the way. How relevant could her grandfather's political views/possible IRA membership really be?
The prospects section (other than the constituency bit which could be used elsewhere) is speculation of the worst kind and the claim about her deep voice is off the wall.
If it's notable enough at all, the section on her "Children's schooling" could do with being cut down to size.
The second paragraph on religion seems a bit speculative. The article provides no basis - other than prejudice and an explicit reference to the speculation by third parties - for the presumption of Kelly's religious opinions might affect her views on scientific and gay rights issues. I think we should have something a little more solid, before we start making these kind of claims. Caveat lector 00:26, 21 August 2007 (UTC)[reply]