Wikipedia:Peer review/Rock & Roll McDonald's/archive1
Rock & Roll McDonald's edit
I was going to nominate this as a WP:GAC. However, it is quite short for a GA. I want to make sure I have done most basic things before nominating the article. TonyTheTiger (talk/cont/bio) 22:15, 23 April 2007 (UTC)
- Comment Having pics on either side of the lead is not recommended. I suggest that the ones on the left be moved lower down the article. The sourcing and text look OK. Not sure about the volume of pics in the gallery section.-- Zleitzen(talk) 02:01, 24 April 2007 (UTC)
Done Moved pics down. TonyTheTiger (talk/cont/bio) 16:17, 24 April 2007 (UTC)
- Comments from Λυδαcιτγ, 01:22, 26 April 2007 (UTC):
- Lead sentence is awkward. You need to make explicit both names, as the shortened version should be obvious from the article name, so just "The Original Rock 'N Roll McDonald's is ..." should be fine. Also, "is one of the most famous" should be followed by the plural ("locations") rather than the singular. Expand the sentence in the interest of clarity to "The Original Rock 'N Roll McDonald's is one of the most famous McDonald's locations in the world, and was once the busiest."
Done 17:55, 3 May 2007 (UTC) - Condense the second 2 sentences to "The restaurant/museum, located in the Near North Side community area of Chicago, Illinois a few blocks west of the Magnificent Mile, has been a tourist attraction since it opened in 1983." Done 17:55, 3 May 2007 (UTC)
- Last sentence to "The site has a Rock & Roll exhibit in a building adjacent to the restaurant, a small upstairs McDonald's museum display. The restaurant has a maximum occupancy of 300, which is about three times the standard patron capacity." Done 17:55, 3 May 2007 (UTC)
- "in order to subsidize the decor" needs a citation
- Don't use 2nd person: change "Downstairs there is a section on the first floor entitled "Chicago Firsts." There you will find events and organizations that originated in Chicago." to "Downstairs there is a section on the first floor entitled "Chicago Firsts, featuring events and organizations that originated in Chicago." Done 17:55, 3 May 2007 (UTC)
- "to name a few" doesn't sound encyclopedic. Done 17:55, 3 May 2007 (UTC)
- Lyrics are generally copyvio, and shouldn't be linked to.
- Gallery is good, but too many pictures. Take out 5, either 3 or 4, 6 and 7 (who wants to see the escalators?), 8 (a garbageman?), and 12 (hard to tell what it's showing), leaving 6 images. Done 17:55, 3 May 2007 (UTC)
- Make the gallery a separate section, as it isn't all about the Rock & Roll Exhibit. Done 17:55, 3 May 2007 (UTC)
- Give captions for gallery photos. Done 17:55, 3 May 2007 (UTC)
- Lead sentence is awkward. You need to make explicit both names, as the shortened version should be obvious from the article name, so just "The Original Rock 'N Roll McDonald's is ..." should be fine. Also, "is one of the most famous" should be followed by the plural ("locations") rather than the singular. Expand the sentence in the interest of clarity to "The Original Rock 'N Roll McDonald's is one of the most famous McDonald's locations in the world, and was once the busiest."