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I've listed this article for peer review because I would like to get it to a GA status. I'm also learning to edit, and a review would be helpful in understanding how to create better articles in the future.

Thanks, Iblum (talk) 17:11, 5 March 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Comment: Great work! I have a few parts of the article you should work on:

In the "Life as an artist" section, you have the prose broken up into a list-like section. I would suggest removing the bold from the years and combining 2 or more time periods into 1 paragraph.
The "Family life" section is too short. I think it could be merged with the "Early life" section, and changing the title to "Biography", "Personal life", or something similar to that.
Images: Are you sure there aren't any free alternatives that can be used for the picture of her? This isn't mandatory, although if you can find a freely licensed picture of her (in public domain or CC), I would highly recommend replacing it with the free image.

Aside from those mentioned, I've also made several minor edits for grammar and WP:MOS. Overall, I think this is a great article, and when the issues are fixed the article is fit for a GA review. Codyorb (talk) 19:48, 8 March 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for making the revisions! I don't see any problems with the article, so I'll close the review. Codyorb (talk) 17:45, 9 March 2018 (UTC)[reply]