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Popstars The Rivals edit

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I've listed this article for peer review because I want to see what improvements could be made to promote this long-overdue article to good article standard. I would appreciate more help from other editors in improving the page. Some sections are incomplete because I need help finding sources etc.

Thanks, 03md (talk) 09:40, 22 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from ChrisTheDude (talk · contribs)
  • Song titles should be in quote marks
  • Comma after "first series of Popstars"
  • There seems to be a random apostrophe after "Popstars: The Rivals Extra"
  • The use of "Popstars The Rivals" vs "Popstars: The Rivals" is inconsistent - pick one and stick to it throughout
  • No need for capital on "Presenters" in section heading
  • Why is "Big Brother" a red link? There is certainly an article on the UK version
  • No need for capital on "Company" in "Record Company executive"
  • Don't refer to judges by their first names alone, surnames is the encyclopedic way to do it
  • Some dates are in US format - as this is a UK subject the UK format should be used eg "5 August 2002" not "August 5, 2002"
  • ....and don't wikilink dates
  • Refs 1 and 2 within the "Auditions" section are not formatted or even enclosed within <ref> tags - also, they should come after punctuation marks, not before
  • "For the first few episodes" - not very precise
  • "the 6 remaining" => "the six remaining"
  • Kimberley Walsh's name is spelt wrong throughout
  • ....and what's with the asterisk after her age? It doesn't seem to be explained
  • Why is the original artist listed for some songs but not others?
    • I will add the artists that I can now, although some I am not sure about because of multiple songs with the same name.
  • Under "winners", almost all of the section about OTV is one huuuuuuuge sentence which needs to be broken up
  • "She was also chosen as the Great Britain's" - lose the word "the"

Hope this helps -- ChrisTheDude (talk) 21:54, 25 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]