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Pokémon Red and Blue edit

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I am trying to get this article to featured status, so I am requesting a peer review to try and iron out most of the obvious issue. Any comments, suggestions, and help would be greatly appreciated. Thanks, Artichoker[talk] 23:26, 18 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from SriMesh | talk 04:15, 21 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]

  • handheld--> hand held or provide wikilink for term or an inline citation as it is not a dictionary word.
  • provide wikilink Multiplayer video game for multiplayer
  • Is run-throughs a word? Perhaps sentence could be re-worded.
Run-throughs is used in a quote, so I can't change it or wiki-link it.
  • The very fist time IGN is mentioned it should be spelled out...Imagine Games Network (IGN) wikilinked and then parenthesized so folks no what the heck an IGN actually is.
IGN is already wiki-linked, and is also the title of the Wikipedia article. And as far as I know, no other video games spell out the company.
  • As there is no wikilink for the made up non dictionary term...Pokemoniversary

.. there should be an inline citation to a Pokemoniversary source.

Pokémoniversary is already cited at the end of the full quote by George Harrison (cite number 32.)
  • good job for using Non-free use media rationale for Pokémon Red and Blue on the image pages for this article.
  • good job separating out sub articles so this article is not too long.

Kind Regards and good luck

I have addressed the rest of your concerns. Thank you, Artichoker[talk] 15:25, 21 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]