Passive dynamics edit
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I've listed this article for peer review because I'm seeking advice from other people on how to improve this wiki entry since it's my first contribution. I'd appreciate any advice on style or content that anybody has to offer.
Thanks, DBSpeakers (talk) 21:00, 14 April 2008 (UTC)
Ruhrfisch comments: Interesting article that needs some work to better conform to Wikipedia's Manual of Style. Here are some suggestions to help improve it:
- The image at the bottom needs a WP:FAIR USE rationale, should just be an image (not a gallery), and should go at the top right corner per WP:MOS#Images
- The lead needs to be expanded to summarize the whole article - see WP:LEAD
- The artilce needs many more references - my rule of thumb is that every statistic, every quote, every attributed statement, and, in general, every paragraph, needs a reference. Currently whole sections and paragraphs are unreferenced (for example the History section and the two paragraphs following it). See WP:CITE and WP:V
- I would say each sentence in this paragraph needs its own reference: The original model for passive dynamics is based on human and animal leg motions. Completely actuated systems, such as the legs of the Honda Asimo robot, are not very efficient because each joint has a motor and control assembly. Human-like gaits are far more efficient because movement is sustained by the natural swing of the legs instead of motors placed at each joint.
- Some of the wording seems unencylcopedic in tone and also seems to espouse a Point of View - for example guzzle in Unlike traditional robots, which guzzle energy by using motors to control every motion... or excellent in Tad McGeer's 1990 paper "Passive Walking with Knees" provides an excellent overview on the advantages of knees for walking legs. Unless you have a citation that refers to it as an excellent overviewe, just call it a an overview or perhapos a comprehensive overvierw. Also Passive dynamics is a valuable addition... - who sayd it is a valuable addition? Cite it or use more neutral language. See WP:PEACOCK and WP:NPOV
- Make sure to explain or if possible avoid jargon - see WP:JARGON, and to provide context to the reader -see WP:PCR.
- Be consistent and link on the first instance of a word or phrase - so is it "specific cost of transport" (and link this) or specific cost of transport
- Use <ref>Blah</ref> tags to add references and then put <reflist> at the bottom and the refs will all show up. Again, see WP:CITE
- References go after punctuation
- I see you already know the cite templates, which work well with ref tags.
- Please don't write things like "and can be seen at the link below." Make it a reference instead - I did this as an example, but guessed at a title.
- Please give both metric and English units - {{convert}} is very useful here.
Hope this helps, you may want to ask for other reviewers' commnets ay WP:PRV Ruhrfisch ><>°° 10:55, 18 April 2008 (UTC)