Wikipedia:Peer review/Orlando Pace/archive1

Orlando Pace edit

Would like to get input how to make this article better. I know there are some things that need to be done, but would like input from others. --Pinkkeith 17:41, 5 March 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Review by Flex edit

I made a few minor changes, but the article needs an image that is compatible with the WP image licenses (shouldn't be too hard to find) and should also make use of {{citeweb}} for its sources.

Beyond that, the article is too enthusiastic and unencyclopedic at points. Statements like his height and weight make him "well-suited for the tackle position" and "perhaps his greatest asset is his athleticism - Pace's quickness of reflexes and speed are unmatched among NFL offensive linemen" and "Memorably, in a 2002 game against the Washington Redskins, on an interception return, Pace managed to run down cornerback Champ Bailey..." and "In addition, he laid out Ray Lewis and Peter Boulware on a massive block that sprung Marshall Faulk for a touchdown in 2003" are editorializing at best and POV at worst. --Flex (talk|contribs) 19:46, 5 March 2007 (UTC)[reply]