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New York in the American Civil War edit
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I've listed this article for peer review because I want to see if it can be upgraded to A status, and to add any input from reviewers in terms of overall improvements.
Thanks, 8th Ohio Volunteers (talk) 15:54, 14 August 2008 (UTC)
Ruhrfisch comments: Very briefly, here are some suggestions for improvement. If you want more comments, please ask here.
- Per WP:LEAD the bolded words in the lead should not be linked. My rule of thumb is to include every header in the lead in some way but Memorialization does not seem to be there.
- Please see WP:HEAD - headers should not repeat the title of the article, so "New York early in the war" needs to be changed. Since this section talks about the end of the war in 1865, calling this section "early in the war" seems a bit odd too.
- Organization of the article is also somewhat non-chronological. The election of 1860 (before the war) is desribed after the military history, the politics section also describes the NYC draft riots briefly before the section on them. I looked at the Civil War in Ohio article and it seems better organized.
- Internet refs need URL, title, author if known, publisher and date accessed. {{cite web}} and other cite templates may be helpful. See WP:CITE and WP:V
- Galleries are discouraged if you want to go to FA.
Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). Yours, Ruhrfisch ><>°° 01:39, 22 August 2008 (UTC)