New Netherland edit
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I've listed this article for peer review because…substantial work has been done in the last months with improved text, format, references, links, and series template
Thanks, Djflem (talk) 00:10, 3 March 2009 (UTC)
Finetooth comments: This is a most interesting and enjoyable article. It is broad and possibly comprehensive, neutral, stable, well-written, and well-illustrated. At least some of the references still have problems, as noted below, and I have a few other suggestions for improvement.
- I believe those em dashes in the infobox should be en dashes.
- A, an, and the are normally avoided as the first word of a section title unless it's a proper noun. Thus,
"The North River and the Manhattans" should be shortened to "North River and the Manhattans". Ditto for all other section heads like this one.
Origins
- (The narrows are named for Giovanni da Verrazzano who had sighted them in 1524.[2]) - Footnote number after end parentheses?
- One-sentence and two-sentence paragraphs are generally frowned upon. Suggestion:
merge the three short ones at the end into one bigger one.*"1613-1614" - En dash in date ranges rather than hyphen, per Manual of Style. Ditto elsewhere in the article.
Development
- "were used by the New Netherland Company (a newly formed alliance of trading companies) to win their patent" -
Should this be "its patent" rather than "their patent"?
Algonquians and the Iroquois
- "It is likely the Hudson's peaceful contact with the local Mahicans" -
Should that be "that Hudson's" rather than "the Hudson's"?
Early settlement
- "Most of the settlers were not Dutch, but Walloons, Huguenots, or Africans (who were brought as slaves)." -
Merge with the paragraph above?
Director-General of New Amsterdam
- "During the period of his governorship that province experienced exponential growth." -
Should it be "the province" rather than "that province"?
Fresh River and New England
- "50 Dutch miles" - Not sure what this means. If Dutch miles differ from miles, an in-text explanation would help.
Legacy
- "as well as by the character of those who immigrated to it" - Emigrated" rather than "immigrated"?
"Lore"
- "The seven arrows in the lion's left claw in the Republic's coat of arms, representing the seven provinces, was a precedent for the thirteen arrows in the eagle's left claw in the Great Seal of the United States." - Merge with paragraph above?
"References"
- Some of the citations are incomplete. All the on-line ones need access dates, for example. They should have publishers and publication dates too, if possible. You may be asked whether the dot-coms are reliable sources.
Images
- Images generally should be set to "thumb" size rather than a forced pixel width except for the lead image in the infobox.
- I think the image licenses are OK except that the source is not clearly identified for Image:Wpdms aq block 1614.jpg. It's probably a scan from a book, certainly in the public domain. It would be good to add bibliographic data about the source if you can track it down.
I hope these suggestions prove helpful. If so, please consider reviewing another article, especially one from the PR backlog. That is where I found this one. Finetooth (talk) 04:03, 8 March 2009 (UTC)
Some of above has been implemented. See below for reference check. Other question regarding footnote, miles, etc to be researchedDjflem (talk) 12:05, 9 March 2009 (UTC)