Wikipedia:Peer review/Mountainboarding/archive1

Mountainboarding edit

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I've listed this article for peer review because I have just completely re-written the article with some collaborators, and it's my first major edit of a Wikipedia article. I would like some feedback to make sure it meets quality standards etc.

Thanks, DLangrish (talk) 15:46, 2 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Finetooth comments: Here are a few suggestions for improvement:

  • The article has far too many short sections. They should be combined into longer text sections with fewer abrupt breaks. For example, the five parts of the "History" section could easily be turned into a single section under the head, "History".
  • Lists should be turned into straight prose.
  • Direct links from the text to external sites are deprecated. Instead, use inline citations. For example, in the UK subsection, instead of linking directly to the NoSno site, add an inline citation at the end of the sentence.
  • Citations should include author, title, publisher, date of publication, url, and access date if all of these are known. The "cite" family of templates is handy for doing citations. They live at WP:CIT. You can copy and paste the templates into an article or your sandbox and fill in the blanks.
  • Bold text is used only for the main topic text in the first line of the lead. Aside from the automated bolding for section heads, it should not appear at all in the article. The many bolded names in the lists in this article should all be changed to ordinary type.
  • Parts of the article lack sources. A good rule of thumb is to provide a source for each paragraph, each statistic, each direct quote, and any unusual claims or claims that might be reasonably challenged.
  • Image licenses should include a description of the image subject and the location in which the image was created.
  • Wikilink slopestyle and boardercross in the lead?

I hope these few suggestions prove helpful. Finetooth (talk) 22:38, 7 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]