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I've listed this article for peer review because…
I'm hoping to improve this article, with the possibility of FA status my long-term goal. Therefore, I am looking for all manner of suggestions. I understand that the two main concerns raised over this article's history has been lack of RS and a need for expansion of the reception section. I acknowledge these, but also point out that there seem to be no other editorial reviews of the novel in question that I haven't found yet, and that few sources exist for this topic. Therefore, style-related suggestions are greatly appreciated, and if any sources can be suggested, those would be helpful too.
Thanks, Brambleclawx 14:40, 23 June 2011 (UTC)
- Mostly style-related suggestions from Nikkimaria
- "reviewers such as Booklist and Horn Book Review, who" - those publications aren't reviewers (or people - can't use "who" as written), but publish reviews by reviewers
- "The" in "The New York Times" is part of the title and should be italicized
- Can the "series editor" be included in the infobox?
- Media type in infobox excludes the e-book format mentioned in the lead
- "it was hard to write the death of Feathertail at the end of Moonrise because death is a difficult subject" - that doesn't really tell us anything. If she gives more info (as in why it's a difficult subject), then include that; if not, rephrase to something like "noted that the death of Feathertail at the end of Moonrise was particularly difficult to write" and leave out the attempted explanation
- WP:ENGVAR - use consistent spellings. For example, you currently have both "travelling" and "traveling"
- Is Sharptooth killed by crushing or from a pierced throat? If this is not specified in the book, it shouldn't be specified here
- Ellipses shouldn't be in square brackets
- Referencing format needs some cleaning up for consistency. All web citations should include publisher and access date
- Don't repeat cited sources in External links. Nikkimaria (talk) 15:14, 23 June 2011 (UTC)