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Hello there Peer Review type persons!

I've listed this article for peer review because I'm just trying some small articles as I am new to Wikipedia, and I'd like a heads up on how to improve this article. I hope to become a more large scale contributer but I know from little things, big things grow.
Is the tone appropriate?
Although I know the person's date of birth, I have decided to only list their year of birth, due to privacy concerns. Is this the right decision?
Also, my coding may be a tad iffy.
Advice for future efforts gratefully accepted. Thanks, E. Swann (talk) 10:50, 7 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Ink Runner (talk · contribs)

I see superscripts, but the footnotes don't appear. Add {{reflist}} to the page wherever you want the footnotes show up.
Maybe organize the discography with tables?

Reply from E. Swann (talk · contribs) Thanks Ink Runner! Have inserted Reflist and tables... yr help is most appreciated. E. Swann (talk) 12:17, 8 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from DanaBoomer

For the references, make sure you have the publisher and not the work. For example, the publisher for ref 1 would be MOG Inc, not Mog.com, and for ref 9 it would be Entertainment Depot, rather than Entertainmentdepot.com.au.
Check the reliability of your references. Blogs are generally not considered reliable.
The lead should be a summary of the entire article, with no original information. My suggestion would be to move most of the information currently in the lead to a section titled "Career" or something of the sort, and leaving the lead as a summary of the information in the entire article. Because it's a summary, it doesn't need to be referenced.
Is there any information available to expand this article? It is still very short. I would especially suggest looking for anything of a personal nature on Monika. A short section on where she was born, who her parents were, and other early career and personal information would be great.

I've done some reformatting on the article, just to make everything be in the right place. I didn't change any of the content. I don't watchlist peer reviews, so if you have any questions about this review, please contact me on my talk page. Dana boomer (talk) 03:00, 12 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]