Wikipedia:Peer review/Mauricio Gugelmin/archive1
Mauricio Gugelmin edit
I've been working on this article for a while, mostly adding info as it has been discovered. I know that the prose needs some improvement, but I'd like to hear any comments you may have so that I can improve the article and maybe get it to good article status.
I'd welcome anything you have to say. Readro 00:15, 27 November 2006 (UTC)
- Intresting, first can "Personal and early life" be expanded? Does the "Career" have to be subdivided so much? makes the article look stubby. Also footnotes go after punctuation. The prose could be more polished, akward prose example would be couple instance of a year being described with an adjective: "1998 was not as successful." - Tutmosis 00:29, 27 November 2006 (UTC)
- I totally agree with all your points. I've tried to follow the standard sort of format for racing drivers (see Damon Hill for example), but Gugelmin is nowhere near as well known, and so the article has ended up looking a bit stubby. I should probably re-think the sections. The prose will be looked at soon, but my main priority was fleshing out the article, so some sections might not flow as well. Thanks for your thoughts. Readro 00:40, 27 November 2006 (UTC)
- OK, I've merged some of the smaller sections together to remove the "stubbiness". Also corrected the footnote positioning. Readro 00:56, 27 November 2006 (UTC)