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I've listed this article for peer review to check the comprehensiveness of the lead as well as the quality of the prose.

Regards, Efe (talk) 13:22, 2 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Finetooth comments: Looks good to me except for prose issues in the lead. Images look fine. Image licenses look fine. Here are my suggestions:

Lead

Spell out extended play (EP) on first use?

Usually EP is not spelled out in music articles. --Efe (talk) 08:01, 8 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]

"The data are compiled by Nielsen Soundscan based on each album's weekly physical and digital sales." - When it's easy to flip the order, using active voice is usually better than passive voice. Suggestion: Nielsen Soundscan compiles the data based on each album's weekly physical and digital sales."

I am worried about the transition. It will look choppy. --Efe (talk) 08:01, 8 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]

"among the releases that have reached the peak the position in 2008" - Remove extra "the"?

Removed. --Efe (talk) 08:01, 8 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]

"Country singer Taylor Swift's Fearless is the longest-running album among the releases that have reached the peak the position in 2008, with 11 non-consecutive weeks beginning with the issue dated November 29 and continuing into the 2009 chart year." - Suggestion: "Country singer Taylor Swift's Fearless, in the top spot for 11 non-consecutive weeks beginning with November 29 and continuing into the 2009 chart year, is the longest-running album among the releases reaching the peak position in 2008.
"include Jack Johnson fifth studio album" - Possessive: "Johnson's"?
"... Death Magnetic, each spent three straight weeks on the chart." - Full stop after Magnetic. Start next sentence with "Each".
'The album also snagged... " - Slang. "Produced"? "Achieved"?
"a feat previously held in 2005" - "Accomplished" rather than "held"?
"had the most vinyl albums sold in 2008, accounting to 26,000 units" - Do you mean "amounting to"?
"Pop singer Mariah Carey earned her sixth" - "Recorded" rather than "earned"?
"third place for most number-one albums by a female act" - "Woman" rather than "female act"?

If you find these suggestions helpful, please consider reviewing another article, especially one from the PR backlog. That is where I found this one. Finetooth (talk) 00:20, 8 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]