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I've listed this article for peer review to check the quality the prose if its up to the standards of FLCs.

Thanks, Efe (talk) 02:07, 5 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Finetooth comments: This is the third of three, all similar. I haven't noticed any problems with the charts, but I have a few suggestions about the prose again. You are right in thinking the prose is the weak link. If you can track down a friend who likes to copyedit, you might be able to focus on the charts while the friend polishes the lead sections. Just a thought.

Lead

"The album spent two non-consecutive weeks at the top spot of Billboard 200, the first TV soundtrack to achieve since the Miami Vice soundtrack in the 1980s." - Missing word?
"Unpredictable by Jamie Foxx and the compilation album Now 22 each spent at number for three weeks." - Something is missing here too, and what is a compilation album?
"topped the chart with the strength of 156,000 unit sales" - I think that should be "on the strength".
"giving him his first chart topper album in nearly 29 years of his career" - Change to "giving him the first chart-topper album of his 29-year career"?
"and the his best first-week sales since Billboard 200 incorporated data tracked" - Extra word. It's either "the" or "his".
"Band Red Hot Chili Peppers earned their first number-one album, Stadium Arcadium, for the first time in their 22-year career as well as crediting the band their best sales in a week." - Using "Band" as a modifier in this way is a bit awkward. I'm not sure "earned" is the right word or that "crediting" is the right word. How about "The Red Hot Chili Peppers band recorded its first number-one album, Stadium Arcadium, in its 22-year history. This led to the group's best sales in a single week."?
"Evanescence's The Open Door gave the band their first number-one album, and became the 700th number one in the history of Billboard 200." - "Which" instead of "and"? "Its" instead of "their"?
"Jay-Z earned his ninth number-one album, Kingdom Come, tying The Rolling Stone for the third act with most number ones in the United States." - How about "recorded" instead of "earned"? "Created" might be another good alternative. Also, I don't know what "third act" means.
"The compilation series Now That's What I Call Music! hit two number-one albums this year: series 22 and 23. The 23rd installment gave the series its 10th number one." - I don't know what a compilation series is or what it means for a series to "hit two number-one albums". A brief in-text explanation would help provide more context for the reader.

Images

The caption for the lead image mentions 2007. Should that be 2006?
Licenses look OK to me as do the photos themselves and the placement.

I hope these suggestions prove helpful. Best of luck with this article and the other two as well. Finetooth (talk) 21:20, 10 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]

All done. Thanks Finetooth. --Efe (talk) 08:23, 13 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]