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I've listed this article for peer review because I need to see what others think of it.

Thanks, -- K. Annoyomous24 21:58, 18 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

If the list develops into a more larger list and the history of the team grows, sure but currently, no. -- K. Annoyomous24 22:21, 19 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments by User:Yohhans - NB: these are all suggestions. Take them with a grain of salt.

  • The second and third sentence flow better if you merge them: The Toronto Raptors are a professional basketball team based in Toronto, Ontario. They and are the only National Basketball Association (NBA) team to be based in Canada.
  • The franchise's was first coached by Brendan Malone who coached only for a year. - reads better to me as, "The team's first coach was Brendan Malone who coached for one year."
  • Sam Mitchell is the franchise's all-time leader in both regular season coached and wins. --> Sam Mitchell is the franchise's all-time leader in the number of games coached, and the number of wins accumulated.
  • Is there a reason you list Sam Mitchell right after Brendan Malone? Would it not make more sense to list the coaches chronologically? That is, move the Sam Mitchell sentence so that it is after the one talking about Brendan Malone and Kevin O'Neill.
  • Lenny Wilkens is the only person to coach the Raptors and be inducted into the Basketball Hall of Fame as a coach. --> Lenny Wilkens is the only Raptors coach to have been inducted into the Basketball Hall of Fame as a coach.
  • Also, another comment on the Hall of Fame sentence: at the end it says, "as a coach". Does this mean some of the other coaches have been inducted as players? If not, I would suggest dropping the "as a coach" and adding this sentence, "It is worthy to note that Wilkens was inducted both as a player, and as a coach."
  • Brendan Malone and Kevin O'Neill are the only coaches who coached the Raptors that has never played for the NBA. --> Of the coaches, Brendan Malone and Kevin O'Neill are the only ones to have never played in the NBA.
  • The current coach Sam Mitchell has been coaching the Raptors since 2004. - commas after "coach" and "Mitchell"
  • Spent entire coaching career with the Raptors while in the NBA --> Spent entire NBA coaching career with the Raptors
  • I suggest removing the superscripts * and †. Rather, just highlight the entire row (makes it a little cleaner without all of those superscripts running around). Then the key would look like the following:

  Elected into the Basketball Hall of Fame as a coach
  Spent entire NBA coaching career with the Raptors

# Number of coaches
GC Games Coached
W Wins
L Loses
T Ties
W – L % Win – Loss percentage
– Returning from previous year(s) of coaching
  • You should include full titles in your references. So "The Offical Site of Canada's Team" becomes "Raptors.com - The Official Site of Canada's Team" and "Who are we?" becomes "Who are we? - The Air Canada Centre", etc.
  • Move Toronto Raptors Coach Register to an External Links section and get rid of the General and Specific subheadings. Place External Links after the References section.
  • Is there any way we could get an image of one of the coaches (preferably free)?
  • That's all I have. Hope this helps!
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