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I have requested a peer review of this list in order to establish what should be expected in a future nomination. The piece, written and created by Tony the Marine, one of this project's veteran writers and a cornerstone of WP:PUR, covers the biographical aspects of research done in Puerto Rico (or by Puerto Ricans elsewhere). I take responsibility of this review, particularly based on the significant amount of research that has been invested upon it. Thanks for your time. - Caribbean~H.Q. 03:46, 28 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

You need to do extensive copyediting. I've done a fair bit just now, but I reckon there's heaps that I've missed. And you can never do enough copyediting.
Consider renaming this List of Puerto Rican scientists and inventors, since this article appears to be more a list of individual Puerto Rican scientists than an article covering them as a whole.Moved Tony the Marine (talk) 00:13, 26 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]
There are a lot of portraits that haven't got borders or captions. This doesn't look good- the reader is forever looking backwards and forwards, matching the faces on the right with the names on the left. Fixed Tony the Marine (talk) 00:13, 26 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]
The whole thing looks messy somehow. Particularly the Aerospace section, which is very long and doesn't seem very organized. Consider organizing all the people into tables. An excellent example of a list containing tables of people along with portraits and short descriptions of them can be found here.
For each subject area you've got a short paragraph explaining what it is. I don't think that's necessary; we have articles on all those things. But if you want to keep them in, you've missed the one for Agriculture.

I hope you don't think I'm being harsh with my criticism, but I think this article is still a way off meeting GA or WP:FA status. Best of luck, and feel free to drop me a message at my talk page any time. Regards, Reyk _YO! 04:11, 2 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]

I'm working on a new format shaped after the "List of Prime Ministers of Sri Lanka". I should have mentioned it earlier, but the idea is taking this to WP:FLC not WP:GAC or WP:FAC. - Caribbean~H.Q. 17:12, 9 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]