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List of Fruits Basket chapters edit

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I'm requesting a peer review to help clean it up before taking it to FLC, and my collaborator on cleaning up the Fruits Basket articles has declined to review it because of spoilers. In particular, I'm looking for suggestions for the formatting of the information about the separate English language releases, and either assurances that the volume summaries aren't too long or suggestions of how to trim. (My one previous manga FLC process, it was much easier to write short summaries.) As well as any other problems you might see.

Thanks for any assistance.

—Quasirandom (talk) 19:46, 4 March 2008 (UTC)[reply]

SGGH

I suggest:

Move citation [3] to the end of the sentence before citation [4]
If "Ultimate Editions" is a title it should be Ultimate Editions rather than in ""
A suggestion, perhaps some section headers as breaks in the listof volumns to enable quicker navigation? Perhaps every 20 volumes or something similar?
Statements in the plot sections which are more than a summary of the plot (i.e. theories on the meaning of events, on the mental attitude or a character, or anything that has been inferred from the story, ought to ideally be cited, I realise this may be difficult at times.
I'd chuck a "clear" template under the image, as on widescreen computers and lapops it runs over the list of volumes page break.

All I can think of, hope this helps!

Thankee. Stuff to think about -- especially the headers breaks, though I'm not sure how yet. For the fourth item, could you point to specific statements you see as being problematic? I tried to be careful for, for example, statements about mental states to only those reported by characters in their own thoughts. (Which is why it's not made clear why in volume 21 Tohru offers her hand to Akito, even though I'm pretty sure I know the reason -- but Tohru doesn't explicitly say or think about it.) —Quasirandom (talk) 15:50, 16 March 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Well I didn't find any, which is why my comment was more of a "if there are some" rather than "there are some." Or at least, if I didn't put that across, it is what I meant to put across :) Wikipedia:Manual of Style (anime- and manga-related articles) may help with this article too. SGGH ^speak! 16:21, 20 March 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Ah -- thankee for the clarification. I'll go through and double-check each statement to make sure it's patent in the text. (WP:MOS-AM doesn't yet have much to say about this type of article, aside from cross-referencing the newly created {{Graphic novel list}} -- this was my first time creating a list from scratch using that, thus my wobblyness.) —Quasirandom (talk) 17:41, 20 March 2008 (UTC)[reply]