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Korkoro

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Would like to see this article developing into a FA someday with inputs from experienced editors. Thanks, _morelMW^illiam 08:43, 16 June 2011 (UTC)

Review

This looks like an interesting film, but I think more can be done with the article. Here are some suggestions:

• Needs a copyedit for prose and WP:MOS problems. Perhaps someone at the WP:Guild of Copyeditors can help.
• Each of the sections can do with more expansion. Here is a sampling of information that should be incorporated. Perhaps somebody of Wikiproject Films could help with finding industry sources:

• Do you know the shooting schedule?
• How long did it take to shoot the film?
• Was the film set primarily outdoors, or were indoor scenes shot in a studio or someplace?
• What did it cost to make the film? How much money did the film earn?

• The cast section should be more that a bulleted list. Depending on what the sources tell you, try to fill information about the cast in relation to the film. For example:

• How did the actors become involved?
• Did the director want specific actors?

• The "screening" should also be more than a bulleted list. Do any of the sources give reactions or post-screening reviews of the film?
• The critical reception section isn't too bad. The link to the Arizona Reporter should be reformatted to link in the references section, and the names of magazines and newspapers should be in italics.
• The Awards section needs to be tidied.
• The article needs a themes and maybe style section. What are the themes in the film? Does the filmmaker use a specific style?
• Use the toolbox at the top of the page to identify links to be disambiguated, and fix.

I don't know a lot about film articles, but I'd suggest having a look at other articles about films that are featured articles, found here.

I hope this is helpful. Thanks. Truthkeeper88 (talk) 19:40, 18 June 2011 (UTC)

Comments

Thanks for your time, Truthkeeper88. I would redo the article with your comments in mind. _morelMW^illiam 03:00, 19 June 2011 (UTC)

I converted the sections, Screenings, Cast and awards to tables. I am not sure about the themes and style section. Let me check the featured articles. I think I should expand the lead. Now trying to find the production info._morelMW^illiam 05:45, 19 June 2011 (UTC)