Wikipedia:Peer review/Karen Dotrice/archive2
Karen Dotrice edit
<guilt button>So, what? Does everybody read through this list saying, "Don't care. Don't care. Who? Don't care. Eh. Don't care..."? With what incentive does that leave me to read and comment when I have the time and experience? You do remember the little girl from Mary Poppins, right? A few weeks ago, she didn't even exist at Wikipedia. Now, this article has undergone extensive revision for a second try at Featured Article status. This isn't about the subjects for which we care; rather, it's about Wikipedia that we're supposed to care. Your comments are welcome.</guilt button> RadioKirk talk to me 20:29, 10 January 2006 (UTC)
- "Critics were enchanted by her performance". Weasel terms. Either atribute this to someone notable (in the form "John Doe said critics were enchanted by her performance") or say which critics declared themselves "enchanted" by her performance.
- "Mary Poppins was a huge hit with audiences" It's better not to make such a judgement. Simply mention the box office numbers.
- "The Gnome-Mobile was not as successful[4] as Poppins". Ditto.
- I recommend adding more info about her life, specially the early years, and also on film critic's reactions to her work. JoaoRicardotalk 21:01, 11 January 2006 (UTC)
- Response: Thank you for your help! In order: 1) Attribution footnoted, but I guess I can throw Maltin's name in there; 2) and 3) Will do; 4) No such animal: I've searched high and low for anything beyond what is included and, at least on the Internet, it doesn't exist (of course, if you see something I missed, please, pass it on, with my thanks). RadioKirk talk to me 21:09, 11 January 2006 (UTC)
- You're right, I searched on Google for her and came up with the same sources you had found. I reformatted the "Personal" section into a "Life" section, to gather all her biographical information in one place. Problem is that the lead may be a little too short now. As for the British vs. English question, I really don't know what should be used. JoaoRicardotalk 21:59, 11 January 2006 (UTC)
- Cool, thank you so much. I may try to reformat some things to incorporate the changes with the conventions I've seen in other articles, and I'll let you know. Meantime, barring a definitive answer, I've settled on "English" since that appears to be her preference. :) RadioKirk talk to me 22:36, 11 January 2006 (UTC)
- Update: I hope I now have incorporated the best of both our ideas. Feel free to comment :) RadioKirk talk to me 23:38, 11 January 2006 (UTC)
- Cool, thank you so much. I may try to reformat some things to incorporate the changes with the conventions I've seen in other articles, and I'll let you know. Meantime, barring a definitive answer, I've settled on "English" since that appears to be her preference. :) RadioKirk talk to me 22:36, 11 January 2006 (UTC)
- You're right, I searched on Google for her and came up with the same sources you had found. I reformatted the "Personal" section into a "Life" section, to gather all her biographical information in one place. Problem is that the lead may be a little too short now. As for the British vs. English question, I really don't know what should be used. JoaoRicardotalk 21:59, 11 January 2006 (UTC)