John Hay Beith edit
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This peer review discussion has been closed.
I have no ambitions for this modest little article, and I have put it forward for peer review for a single reason, viz to ask Wikicolleagues' opinions on how to refer to the subject. The man's real name was Beith, and he achieved some military distinction under it. But he was much better known as Ian Hay. (See the list of references, notes 4, 24 and 25, where headlines referring to Beith added an explanatory "Ian Hay".) It felt peculiar to write "Beith's play" etc when everyone would have thought of it as "Hay's play". But can I chop and change between Beith and Hay in mid-article? Grateful for any views. (And any other comments, too, of course.) – Tim riley (talk) 18:07, 26 February 2013 (UTC)
Brianboulton comments: A small gem; my few comments are nothing to write home about, but here they are:
- Link second class degree
- "temporary posts" → "temporary teaching posts"?
- "until 1918, at which..." doesn't sound right. Perhaps "until 1918, when..."?
- "second lieutenant" shouldn't be hyphenated, and a link is available. Likewise "captain" should be pipe-linked via Captain (British Army and Royal Marines)
- Do we have any detail of the action in which he won his MC? Otherwise "In 1916 Beith was awarded the Military Cross" sounds a bit routine
- Link major and major-general in the sentence "From being a major on the retired list, Beith was given the honorary rank of major-general."
- One last observation: it's interesting that he signs his photo portrait "Ian Hay Beith" which was neither his name nor his nom-de-plume.
No further questions, m'lud. Worth a shot at GA, surely? Brianboulton (talk) 11:53, 5 March 2013 (UTC)