Wikipedia:Peer review/Indian Navy/archive2

Second peer review required. Chanakyathegreat 03:49, 18 October 2006 (UTC)[reply]

I haven't had a full read yet, but a recommend checking for redundancies. In the lead "With a total of 55,000 men and women, including 5,000 naval aviation personnel and 2,000 Marine Commandos (MARCOS), it is the world's fifth largest Navy in terms of manpower." can be reduced to "With 55,000 men and women, including 5,000 naval aviation personnel and 2,000 Marine Commandos (MARCOS), it is the world's fifth largest navy." without changing its meaning at all. Double checking the entire article for other things like this can definitely improve the overall writing quality. The general term "navy" is not a proper noun, so you should refer to "a navy" rather than "a Navy". Jay32183 19:46, 18 October 2006 (UTC)[reply]
Please see automated peer review suggestions here. Ruhrfisch 18:52, 21 October 2006 (UTC)[reply]