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I've listed this article for peer review because I would like to eventually make it into a featured article. I have worked on this article in order to make sure that it is accurate and well referenced and I am open to any suggestions on how to improve it.

Thanks, GrandDrake (talk) 06:38, 10 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

I was unable to find information as to how an archival copy could be made when copy protection is engaged, so in its current form I can not approve of the article. 69.228.196.41 (talk) 07:27, 20 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Done. I made a link to the HDCP article clearer (it has a paragraph on HDCP circumvention), added information on HDCP strippers, and added information on a recent HDCP stripper for HDMI. --GrandDrake (talk) 23:08, 20 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Ruhrfisch comments: This has improved since the last peer review. Very briefly, here are some suggestions for improvement.

There are so many acronyms and abbreviations used here that the article becomes hard to follow. The MOS asks that each be defined (spelled out in full) before its first use, but this is not done consistently. In some places (CE for consumer electronics) it is done on the second use. See WP:JARGON too.

Done. Fixed issue with consumer electronics being spelled out the first time. As for jargon the article is detailed and as such is technical. I have tried to make sure that any complex terms are either explained in the article or have a link to a relevant Wikipedi article. --GrandDrake (talk) 13:22, 5 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Could use a copyedit to polish the language - one example The first computer monitors with HDCP support started being released in 2005 and by February 2006 a dozen had been released.[20][21] I think you mean a dozen different models of monitor had been released, but it makes it sound as if only 12 total monitors had been made.

Done. Made the sentence clearer. --GrandDrake (talk) 13:22, 5 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]

I would move "The HDMI Founders ..." paragraph from Overview to History. As it is, the History section does not even tell us who began the development, etc. Who owns the company or patents / designs? Where are its headquarters, research facilities, and manufacturing plants?

Done. Moved paragraph to History section and added information and references on HDMI Authorized Testing Centers. --GrandDrake (talk) 13:22, 5 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]

I did not understand this sentence: Type B is electrically compatible with dual link DVI-D and is not used in any CE products.[38][40] If it is not used in CE, where is it used?

Done. Changed sentence to reflect the fact that currently no products use the Type B connector. --GrandDrake (talk) 13:22, 5 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Per WP:HEAD do not repeat the name of the article in section headers if at all possible, so change (as one example) HDMI and Blu-ray Disc players.

Done. Changed section headers so that none of them use the term HDMI. --GrandDrake (talk) 13:22, 5 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]

I still think some of my comments from the last peer review are valid - what sort of reviews has this had in CE or other trade magazines / websites?

Done. Have noted a PC World award given to HDMI and a Technology and Engineering Emmy Award given to ten companies for their development of HDMI. --GrandDrake (talk) 13:22, 5 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). Yours, Ruhrfisch _><>°^° 15:58, 23 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]