Herschel Greer Stadium edit
- A script has been used to generate a semi-automated review of the article for issues relating to grammar and house style; it can be found on the automated peer review page for March 2009.
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I've listed this article for peer review because I'd like to get it promoted to Featured Article status. It is presently a listed Good Article.
Thanks, NatureBoyMD (talk) 16:35, 31 March 2009 (UTC)
Comments from Ealdgyth (talk · contribs)
- You said you wanted to know what to work on before taking to FAC, so I looked at the sourcing and referencing with that in mind. I reviewed the article's sources as I would at FAC. The sourcing looks good.
- Hope this helps. Please note that I don't watchlist Peer Reviews I've done. If you have a question about something, you'll have to drop a note on my talk page to get my attention. (My watchlist is already WAY too long, adding peer reviews would make things much worse.) 13:54, 4 April 2009 (UTC)
Brianboulton comments:
I don't know a lot about baseball (I've learned most of what I know from Wikipedia articles), but I found this article informative and generally well-written. I do have some concerns, however. Some are quite minor, others will require rather more work.
- My main problem is with the History section, which in my view is overdetailed and therefore much too long. At around 1,800 words it represents more than half the article outside the lead. A reasonable summary of the stadium's history does not need to include so much minor detail about each stage of its development; I would recommend you try to reduce it to a succinct account at around half the present length. There is possibly further overdetailing in Other events section
- Although the prose is generally engaging, it tends sometimes towards sports journalism/baseball terms. I realise this won't be a problem to most of your readers, but the encyclopedia has to aim for a wider audience. I'm not suggesting elimination of all the specialist terms, but hear are a few which struck me either as too informal, or which had me totally mystified:-
- (Lead) "it hosted"
- (History) "on the road"
- (All-Star games): "recorded the save" and "scored the loss"
- (Major league games):"Among those on hand for the game" and "faced off against"
- The article is well illustrated, mainly with your own photographs, but placement could be improved. Why not try a few on the left?
- Questions may be asked about the reliability and impartiality of some of the sources used, around 50% of which are connected to Nashville Sounds.
- Some minor points:-
- Citing the capacity in lead is unnecessary, as the same information is linked in the body of the article.
- Can the "baseball ballpark" repetition be avoided? It rather jars, as you begin reading the article. Perhaps "baseball park", or "baseball venue"?
- You should wikilink first mention of All-Star games
- Why does a baseball stadium need an organist?
I hope that you find these observations helpful. I do not keep a long-term watch on articles I review here, but will always return to the review if you ask via my talkpage. Brianboulton (talk) 22:37, 6 April 2009 (UTC)