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Fulham F.C. season 2009–10 edit

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I've listed this article for peer review because I want to check how I am doing with keeping the article in line with other football season articles. I want to see whether any statistic sections etc. need to be added to the article.

Thanks, 03 md 12:07, 9 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]

In terms of the sections etc it looks sensible. All I would say is that since the subject matter has a largely pre-determined timeframe, it would be better to get the article peer reviewed some time after the end of the season, since 99% of what will be going into the article hasn't happened yet. --Jameboy (talk) 23:00, 10 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Finetooth comments: This is a good start. The sourcing looks good. The tables look pretty good, though some are just getting started. I agree with User:Jameboy that it's a bit premature to ask for a review. A proper lede, for example, can't be written until the main text sections are finished. Even so, here are a few thoughts about things to consider as you proceed.

My main concern is with reader accessibility. Many potential readers don't know much about association football. For them, the jargon of the game can be mystifying, and you will increase your potential readership if you can write for them rather than only for an audience of dedicated fans. Here are a few examples of terms that it might be helpful to link or explain.

"They will enter the Football League Cup at the third round stage due to their participation in European competition." - What is the meaning of the "third-round stage"? What does it have to do with "participation in the European competition"?
Should "fixtures" be explained to general readers unfamiliar with the sport? Does it mean "scheduled matches"?
Should "friendly" be explained?
"FK Vėtra were confirmed as Fulham's opponents after winning the tie 3–2 on aggregate." - What does "on aggregate" mean?
"and Erik Nevland scored a hat-trick against Perth" - Should "hat trick" be linked or explained?
What is central midfield?
"departed at the end of their loan spells" - What are loan spells?

"Fulham began their first European campaign for seven years" - Did the campaign last for seven years? Something must be missing here, or the sentence has a typo.

I hope these few suggestions prove helpful. Finetooth (talk) 04:07, 14 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]