This peer review comes off the recent promotion as a GA. I wish to put this article up as an FAC in the near future and feel that any additional eyes on the article before it goes to that step could save a lot of grief during that process. I'll be most available through this week and in the evenings East Coast American time next week. Feel free to ping with questions. If desired, I am willing to privately message print references lacking an online equivalent to ensure accuracy of citations and content. Best, ~ Pbritti (talk) 18:32, 13 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]
- The following is from this comment from Gog the Mild on the article's talk page:
I only looked at the first two sentences of the lead. Per MOS:LEADSENTENCE this does not "tell the nonspecialist reader what or who the subject is, and often when or where. It should be in plain English". Virtually by definition this article fails this bar as it needs a footnote to explain a term. And I suspect that many readers will still be little the wiser, as who understands "affording latitude"? I know it's linked, but MOS:NOFORCELINK: "Do use a link wherever appropriate, but as far as possible do not force a reader to use that link to understand the sentence. The text needs to make sense to readers who cannot follow links." At a guess there is more similar in the rest of the article. In haste, but I hope it helps.
~ Pbritti (talk) 23:21, 14 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]
- @Pbritti: This has been open for over a month without comments. Are you still interested in receiving feedback? Z1720 (talk) 19:22, 15 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
- I am, @Z1720:. I intend to nominate this article for FA status sometime this year (preferably before June), but my understanding is that a lot of effort that might be expended on PRs is tied up in other tasks like clearing longstanding backlogs and, very importantly, honoring the memory of Vami IV. For this reason, I'm more than willing to be patient. Thanks for following up! ~ Pbritti (talk) 19:29, 15 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
- @Pbritti: The longer a PR is open, the less likely it is to receive responses. One option is to advertise on various Wikiprojects, asking for feedback. Another option is to close this for now, and open a new one in a couple months. Z1720 (talk) 19:31, 15 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
