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I've listed this article for peer review because I'd like to take it to WP:FLC. Please ignore the episode summaries that have not yet been written (obviously), as I am still working on those.

Thanks, Matthewedwards (talk • contribs • email) 08:49, 28 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

The article is well written with few spelling or punctuation issues. I have done some moderate copyediting- you can never have enough copyediting.
- Thank you
In episode four Beagle reverted to his maiden name of Flywheel- and the firm's name changed to Flywheel, Shyster and Flywheel, implying that Groucho's character was both of the Flywheels. Is this oddity mentioned or explained anywhere? I would like to know, and I bet anyone reading the article will wonder too.
- He is both Flywheels. The character thought he was so important the company should be given his name twice. I'll have to think about how I can word that, and look for a reference that backs it up.
In your summary of episode 7, who gets thrown out of the house by the butler? I assume it's Flywheel and Ravelli, but it doesn't read that way.
- I've fixed this. I've also moved the episode list to its own page, List of Flywheel, Shyster, and Flywheel episodes because the article was getting rather big.

Regards, Reyk _YO! 01:44, 2 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for your time. Regards, Matthewedwards (talk • contribs • email) 04:03, 4 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]