Wikipedia:Peer review/Final FRCA/archive1

Final FRCA edit

This peer review discussion has been closed.
I've listed this article for peer review because references have been added and it has been edited to match the Primary FRCA sections which I have also edited.

Thanks, Olimorgan (talk) 11:10, 16 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Ruhrfisch comments: A fairly short article - peer review is usually for more developed work, but here are some suggestions for improvement. SInce this is very similar to Primary FRCA I am recylcing much of that peer review (still applies here too):

  • A model article is often useful for ideas on structure, style, refs, etc. ACT (examination) and SAT are both exam articles that are B class and may offer some ideas.
  • The lead should be an accessible and inviting overview of the whole article. Nothing important should be in the lead only - since it is a summary, it should all be repeated in the body of the article itself, for example Higher Specialist Training.
  • My rule of thumb is to include every header in the lead in some way, so include something for the sections on Form of the Examination, Marking Scheme, Syllabus, and Fellowship. Please see WP:LEAD
  • The lead sentence should probably be something like The Final Examination of the Diploma of Fellowship of the Royal College of Anaesthetists (commonly known as the Final FRCA) is ...[1]
  • Any chance for an image of any sort?
  • Avoid short (one or two sentence) paragraphs and sections as they break up the flow of the article.
  • Avoid bullet lists - convert to prose.
  • Any reason why this article could not be combined (merged) with Primary FRCA? Perhaps as "FRCA Examinations" with redirects from this and Primary FRCA?
  • Or why not make this part of the Royal College of Anaesthetists page?
  • What makes this topic notable - see WP:NN? Where are the independent third-party sources on it?
  • Internet refs need URL, title, author if known, publisher and date accessed. {{cite web}} and other cite templates may be helpful. See WP:CITE and WP:V
  • Much of the article reads like a how to, not an encyclopedia article. See WP:NOT
  • Article could use a copy edit to clean up / polish prose.
  • Please use my examples as just that - these are not an exhaustive list and if one example is given, please check to make sure there are not other occurrences of the same problem.

Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). Yours, Ruhrfisch ><>°° 20:59, 18 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]