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I've listed this article for peer review because… I am seeking additional eyes on the article before nominating this article for good article review. Any copy editing during such a review would also be appreciated.--RightCowLeftCoast (talk) 21:04, 7 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks, RightCowLeftCoast (talk) 21:04, 7 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Brief comments from Nikkimaria

Suggest including a few more chronological markers in his bio - when did he graduate high school? University? When did he marry (not in the article at all)? "Before commanding I Corps, Soriano served as director of homeland security" - as written this could be anytime between the mid-1970s and 2002
In general, the biographical section seems quite short for a GA
Tagged dead links should be dealt with. Nikkimaria (talk) 23:11, 13 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I have done some copy editing, and added the graduation date for SJSU, but I cannot find any reliable sources that give his high school graduation date.--RightCowLeftCoast (talk) 17:14, 14 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]