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I've listed this article for peer review because I want to try to better this article, but I have no idea where to start the clean up. Sorry if the article is bad, but I wanted to know where it can be improved. So please give a brief account on what can be done to better it.

Thanks, TheOriginalSoni (talk) 17:26, 27 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

Too many too short paras in the lead. See WP:LEAD for guidance on how may paras to expect here.
Call it "English language", not "English".
Should "S.D.B." really be "(SDB)" after the title?
"The Telegraph Education Foundation" if this is notable, why doesn't it have an article?
"Telegraph Awards Hall of Fame" ditto.
History section could use being turned into prose rather than just a list of bullet points.
"Mgr. Mathias" what is Mgr.?
Savio is a dab link.
History has no refs at all.
Full of trivia like "The first Past Pupils Day was held In October 1955."...
Don't bold the section titles.
No idea what ISC and ISCE is, nor what the "School Average" (shouldn't that be "average") is.
Again, "Extra-curricular" section is unreferenced, and needs work to prose it rather than just be a list of trivia.
Same with Facilities.

In general it's desperately in need of references. The Rambling Man (talk) 20:21, 4 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]