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Devon and Cornwall County Division edit

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I've listed this article for peer review as I have expanded it over the last few months from a stub to at least a B-Class article. I am looking for comments and suggestions in preparation for making a push for GA status. Thanks, EnigmaMcmxc (talk) 03:04, 22 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Comments: G'day, great work as usual. I have a couple of observations/suggestions: AustralianRupert (talk) 23:14, 17 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]

I made a couple of minor tweaks, please check you are happy with those changes.
I found this sentence a little awkward: "In this capacity of a coastal defence unit..."
Were the division's recruits hastily trained, or partially trained because their role? If so, I suggest maybe adding this.
"were around 10,000 men strong...": I wonder if this could be contrasted with the size of regular divisions?

Thank you for the review. I haven't had much spare time the last few days, but will look over your edits and respond to your comments hopefully soon.EnigmaMcmxc (talk) 12:24, 20 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Comments: It's always intesting to read about these units. I have only a couple of comments:

"During the summer, the Battle of Britain dampened this threat" - minor point, but perhaps tweak to note that it was the British victory in this campaign which reduced the threat
It would be interesting to expand on this division's disbandment: eg, to note that the 77th initially had the same role and units, and to discuss what eventually happened to its personnel and units (eg, were the battalions transferred as formed units, or broken up?) Nick-D (talk) 22:35, 7 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Query: @EnigmaMcmxc: G'day Enigma, this review seems to have stalled, do you wish for me to close it and archive it? The bot that removes it from the PR page appears to be down, but I believe I can manually complete the bot steps. Regards, AustralianRupert (talk) 13:49, 3 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]

It appears this review has stalled, so unless there are any objections I intend to close and archive this review in 24 hours. Regards, AustralianRupert (talk) 00:07, 10 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Ok, I have archived the PR now. Good luck with taking the article further when you get some more time for Wiki. Thanks for your efforts so far. Regards, AustralianRupert (talk) 02:17, 11 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]