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Costello Music edit

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This article failed an FAC, I'd like some pointers as to where to go next with it as I feel I've addressed all concerns raised in the FAC :) Thanks, -- Naerii 23:57, 5 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Ruhrfisch comments: I have actually heard this album and will make some suggestions for improvement:

  • A model article is always useful for ideas, style, structure, etc. There are a large number of music FAs at Wikipedia:Featured_articles#Music that may be suitable models.
  • I would also treat the FAC as a very detailed peer review. I read the FAC and agree with their sugestions - the article needs a copyedit for grammar and to tighten up the article and it seems to be fairly short / lacking detail in places. I would address every point raised, make sure that there are not other similar points to be addressed in other parts of the article (i.e. treat the examples as just that, not a complete list), and then ask the FAC editors to look at the article again and see if their concerns have been addressed. I read for content but noticed some spelling concerns too - i.e. "scount" for "scout"
  • The WP:LOCE can do copyedits or you can ask at WP:PRV in the copyedits section. Reading the article out loud is often helpful too.
  • Per WP:LEAD the lead is supposed to be a summary of the whole article - my rule of thumb is that every section header should be mentioned in the lead somehow, even if it is only a word or phrase. I would read the article carefully and make sure this applies - lyrics really aren't mentioned in the lead, for example. Neither are the B sides and extra tracks.
  • References should be in numerical order so and "Chelsea Dagger" is said by Jon Fratelli to be about a showgirl.[4][1] should be and "Chelsea Dagger" is said by Jon Fratelli to be about a showgirl.[1][4] There may be other instances of this.
  • Find someone at WP:PRV or who has written most of an album article you like and ask them for more ideas.

I hope this helps, if you found it useful please consider peer reviewing a request, especially one with no feedback at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found your request). Ruhrfisch ><>°° 16:42, 9 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]