Wikipedia:Peer review/Children of Bodom/archive1

Children of Bodom edit

I believe this article is one of the most (if not the most) comprehensive resources avaliable on the internet concerning this band from Finland. It has been my project for quite some time, and I feel that it might be shaping into a featured article. However, I do feel that it need improvements, especially its lead section, and I would appreaciate suggestions on what could be done to improve it. --Sn0wflake 02:49, 21 November 2005 (UTC)[reply]

First off, I'm not a music fan. Secondly, I know little of Finland except they like cellphones and produce excellent hockey players (Miikka Kiprusoff just amazes me). Ok, so Children of Bodom...they sing(?) in finnish right, not english? I would get rid of that "Biography" section heading because, well, there really isn't anything beyond that. Just make "Early years" "Album one", "Album two" and "Tour of World" major headings. The Henkka Blacksmith quotation needs to be referenced and no, telling me it is somewhere in the external links or somewhere in a book doesn't count. Where did that last sentence "Children of Bodom's symbol...refer to themselves as the Hate Crew." come from? That entire section is a narrative of the bands experience, then this trivia just comes from nowhere. The "Current line-up" and "Former members" could be made more appealling. Condsider The Waterboys#Membership for what can be done with these sections. Finally, the "External links and references" section...should actually be two separate sections per Wikipedia:Guide to layout#Standardized appendices...actual references in the reference section, recommended readings in the external link section. Footnotes would be nice (just to know what info was obtain from where, for easy verifiability). --maclean25 08:11, 3 December 2005 (UTC)[reply]
- I took your advice and will be working on providing more references, thank you very much for the input. --Sn0wflake 19:34, 4 December 2005 (UTC)[reply]