Boho, County Fermanagh edit
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This article has been massively researched and expanded from its original form (pre-2009 or so); I'd like to get some input from other editors on what they think of the standard and how it could be improved.
Thanks, Fattonyni (talk) 15:48, 31 March 2009 (UTC)
Brianboulton comments: It is obvious that a lot of work has gone into building this article up from a stub, and the active editors are to be congratulated. I would probably grade it B at the moment, but it is could be brought up to GA quite quickly if attention is given to the points listed below.
- The pictures are wonderful, very evocative and a great asset to the article.
- Although in many ways informative, the general tone of the prose is ofter unencyclopedic. It is sometimes the language of a tourist brochure or publicity handout. Examples:-
- "Boho also boasts a fine array of flora and fauna, some of which is unique..." etc (encyclopedic = "Boho has varieties of fauna and fauna, some of which are unique...")
- "Other interesting geological features..." etc (encyclopedic = "Other features...")
- "...the Boho area has an amazing diversity of..." etc (encyclopedic = "the Boho area has many...")
- "...the pub boasts an impressive open hearth..." (encyclopedic = leave it out) You will need to go through the whole article to check this type of writing which would be fine in a magazine but not for an encyclopedia.
- I'm not sure about some of your sources. What makes Family Tree DNA a reliable source? Some references are not formatted properly – [48], [49], [50] for example. Irelandseye.com is the publisher of the "Irish Fairies: Changelings" article - what makes this source reliable?
- Some whole paragraphs are without any citation at all, for example the first and 2nd paras of the "Flora" section,and the first and second paragraphs of "Folk tales". Other paragraphs are very lightly referenced, with just a single citation.
- Sometimes, citations do not specifically support statements in the article. For example the specific statement "The positive side to this low intensity agriculture is that Boho still retains examples of environmentally important species that are in decline on a national scale, such as rich hay meadows, pastures and semi-natural habitats." is cited to [35] and [36], neither which relates to the statement except in a very broad and general way.
- There is overdetailing, particularly in the "Harvesting hay" and "Folk tales sections". The section listing other places called Boho is completely inconsequential, unless there is evidence that these places have a known link to Boho, Fermanagh. The information you have included concerning a school seven miles from Boho, in Enniskillin, also seems out of place in this article.
I hope that these points give you some ideas as to how to continue the good work, and I hope you will do so, as potentially this is a delightful article. Brianboulton (talk) 21:54, 4 April 2009 (UTC)