Wikipedia:Peer review/Battle of Wadi (1916)/archive1

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What would this article need to get to GA status?

Thanks, Flewis(talk) 11:37, 2 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Choess comments:

I'm not really sure what the usual GA standards are for military articles. A few things I noticed:

  • The lede needs a bit of work. "Pushed" is a rather informal phrasing. "considered as a" should be "considered a". Refer to Aylmer by his last name, and explain why his losses led good old Townshend of Chitral to surrender.
  • In the background section, you've given Townshend the wrong rank!
  • The grammar needs a little tightening generally. The opening sentence of "Battle of Wadi" seems rather disjointed.
  • And...I just noticed a copyvio from 1914-1918.net at the bottom of that section. Stop, do not pass go, until you're sure the whole article is originally worded. Sorry. Choess (talk) 04:39, 5 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]