Wikipedia:Peer review/Amaranthus tuberculatus/archive1

Amaranthus tuberculatus edit

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I've listed this article for peer review because this is my first article and I would like to know how to improve it.

Thanks, Pruddle (talk) 02:06, 8 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Ruhrfisch comments: Very briefly, here are some suggestions for improvement. If you want more comments, please ask here.

  • A model article is useful for ideas and examples to follow. There are 17 FAs at Category:FA-Class plant articles, most of which are on plants and would be good models.
  • The lead needs to be expanded to be an accessible and inviting overview of the whole article. Nothing important should be in the lead only - since it is a summary, it should all be repeated in the body of the article itself. My rule of thumb is to include every header in the lead in some way. Please see WP:LEAD
  • Article needs more references, for example It is now found in 40 states. is uncited. My rule of thumb is that every quote, every statistic, every extraordinary claim and every paragraph needs a ref.
  • Provide complete information for sources so others can look them up too. Internet refs need URL, title, author if known, publisher and date accessed. {{cite web}} and other cite templates may be helpful. See WP:CITE and WP:V
  • Any chance of a photo of the plant?
  • Article needs to flow more smoothly - there are lots of very short (one or two sentence) paragraphs that need to be combined with others or exapnded. Also needs a copyedit - seconmd sentence has no period, for example.

Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). Yours, Ruhrfisch ><>°° 18:58, 14 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]