Wikipedia:Peer review/Abdel Halim Mohamed/archive1

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I've listed this article for peer review because… to prepare for the GA review as this process was recommend to me by another editor

Thanks, FuzzyMagma (talk) 18:18, 5 January 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Comments after a quick skim:

The lede is five paragraphs, which according to WP:LEDE is longer than is recommended. I suggest trimming this and ensuring that all of this information is in the body of the article.
Lots of the citations have been put at the end of the paragraph that they are verifying, which makes it hard to figure out which sources verify which sentences. I suggest moving references to be beside the sentence they are verifying.
In "Literary and political activism", the final three sections are quite short, causing MOS:OVERSECTION. Can these be merged or expanded?
Please add the author of the source to the references, if possible.

Those are my thoughts. Z1720 (talk) 22:22, 8 January 2023 (UTC)[reply]

@Z1720 thanks FuzzyMagma (talk) 20:42, 18 January 2023 (UTC)[reply]