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I've listed this article for peer review because it has been extensively edited since its beginning (2009) as such I would appreciate knowing what needs to be done to better it.

Thanks, StephenTS42 (talk) 16:27, 12 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Comments: G'day, thanks for your efforts so far with this article. I have the following suggestions: AustralianRupert (talk) 10:02, 18 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]

  • suggest removing the ROK icon from the infobox as it seems confusing for a US Army unit
  • this sentence should be referenced: "At the end of the war (1945), the 38th Anti-Aircraft Brigade was inactivated in Germany"
  • this should be referenced: the paragraph ending "...were collocated at Osan Air Base"
  • this quote should either be rewritten in your own words, or attributed in text: "On 15 July [1981] the 1st Bn, 2nd ADA..."
  • there are too many images in the Inactivation section. I suggest removing the files and rewriting the information in your own words
  • the "Force Planning and Budgetary Implications..." entry is not an internal link and shouldn't be listed in the See also section (potentially it might be in a Further reading section, though, or could be worked into the text as a reference)
  • the bare urls (refs 9 and 14) should be formatted to include title, publisher and access dates
  • anyway, good luck with taking the article further
@AustralianRupert: Much thanks for your advice. I believe I have followed all your suggestions. I hope the review goes well (I really don't know much about how its done), and yes please proceed with closing and archiving. There really ought to be more like you in Wikipedia. If I can ever do anything for you...please ask for I am grateful for your assistance. ——→StephenTS42 (talk) 14:38, 30 July 2017 (UTC)[reply]
No worries, Stephen, thanks for your efforts with this article. Regards, AustralianRupert (talk) 09:40, 31 July 2017 (UTC)[reply]
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