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I've listed this article for peer review to determine what steps could be taken to move this article towards GA status. There are no other swimming competition/championship articles with this assessment, so bringing this article up to the standard will allow editors of existing and future championship articles to get a feel for the kind of content and prose discussion that is required alongside the typical results section. At this time I'd particularly welcome comments on the quantity of the prose discussion and any areas of interest that are not mentioned.

Thanks, Yboy83 (talk) 23:31, 16 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Ruhrfisch comments: While it is clear a lot of work has gone into this interesting article, it needs a fair amount of work before it can pass WP:GAN. Here are some suggestions for improvement.

A model article is often useful for ideas and suggestions to follow - there are many FAs on sports at Wikipedia:Featured_articles#Sport_and_recreation, although
The lead should be an accessible and inviting overview of the whole article and as such needs to be expanded here. Nothing important should be in the lead only - since it is a summary, it should all be repeated in the body of the article itself. My rule of thumb is to include every header in the lead in some way. Please see WP:LEAD
In the Background section there are two problems, one is that the article does not identify whose idea this was - who organized the meet? The other is the language - this happened in the past, but the language is future tense This event will include the first competitive performance by Michael Phelps in Britain.[2]
The team lists do not seem to have references and there are several other places without refs. My rule of thumb is that every quote, every statistic, every extraordinary claim and every paragraph needs a ref.
The Venue section has no refs either, for example
Internet refs need URL, title, author if known, publisher and date accessed. {{cite web}} and other cite templates may be helpful. See WP:CITE and WP:V
Who were the teams' coaches? Who selected the team members for the US and European teams?
There is no mention that there is a whole Duel in the Pool series until the Format section, about halfway through the article. This should be in the Background section I would think.
I think there needs to be some brief descriptions of the events, not just the tables
There is no alt text for images - see WP:ALT
Language is really rough in spots In the United Kingdom the event was be broadcast live on the BBC's channels and via it's website. Friday's session was be on BBC Three, and Saturday's on BBC One.[16]

Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). I do not watch peer reviews, so if you have questions or comments, please contact me on my talk page. Yours, Ruhrfisch _><>°^° 03:59, 24 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]