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2008-09 Duke Blue Devils men's basketball team edit
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I'm working on this article, and once the season gets under way, I'd like to raise this article to GA status. For the time being however, I'd like to known what should be added and edited. Thanks, Mr.crabby (Talk) 01:08, 28 April 2008 (UTC)
SGGH
I suggest:
- Well your obvious next port of call, as you say, is season information, make sure it is as well referenced as your pre-season information already is!
- "season was very good" perhaps a more encyclopedic term? Or simply quantify it to avoid the prose-related difficulties of qualifying it.
- The opening sentence ends abruptly
- the second sentence is missing a "who" after the comma
- the entire lead could flow more
- your citations have spaced between them and the full stops, there is no need for this.
- I like your "first day of November" link to November 1, however you best see what WP:MOS and WP:DATE have to say on flowery date-making, I'm not sure whether they prefer standard dates or not.
- Off season changes has some small paragraphs that could be merged
- as per WP:DATE, only full day-month-year dates should be wikilinked unless the day itself is of particular notability because of this topic, which they aren't really.
- Ideally, I would personally change "references" to "notes"
Overall, just an expansion and those points above, looks good so far! Well done. SGGH speak! 16:47, 1 May 2008 (UTC)