Wikipedia:Peer review/16 mm film/archive1

16mm edit

I belive that the 16mm article needs more infomation then is all ready there and should aim to please people in the industy and lay folk alike. Kylehamilton 14:24, 1 January 2006 (UTC)[reply]

You might take a look at the order in which the paragraphs are arranged. The third paragraph ("Double-sprocket 16 mm film...") appears to have been inserted between the second and the fourth, resulting in the 4th paragraph lead-in making no sense. Inserting a couple of section headers might help the overall organization as well. The article does need to have some references added with in-line tags (C.f. Template talk:Ref), but otherwise it looks like good work. Thanks. — RJH 22:39, 18 January 2006 (UTC)[reply]