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List of commanders of the British 1st Armoured Division edit

Featured list candidates/List of commanders of the British 1st Armoured Division/archive1

Nominator(s): EnigmaMcmxc (talk) 01:30, 17 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

After a bit of a break, I am back with a new list (will work on the prior failed nom, due to my absence, at a later date and I apologize for not being able to action that more timely). This is the list of commanding officers for the British 1st Armoured Division, which was formed in 1937 and lasted until 1945. It was briefly revived between 1946 and 1947 (a 1st Armoured Division was formed in the 1970s and lasted until the 2000s, but as that was created by the renaming of the 1st Division, its commanding officers are included on a separate list dedicated to the 1st Division). This particular division fought in the Second World War, seeing action in France, North Africa, and Italy with two of its commanding officers becoming wounded in the line of duty. Look forward to all feedback.EnigmaMcmxc (talk) 01:30, 17 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Comments edit

"who would receive orders" => "who receives orders" (as the sentence is talking generally about the concept of a GOC - alternatively change the whole thing to past tense but make it refer to this specific division i.e. "The division was commanded by a general officer commanding (GOC), who received orders"
"and then use the forces" => "and then uses the forces" (or "used" if you follow the second suggestion above)
I have opted for the latter choice, and have tried to reword accordingly for both these points.EnigmaMcmxc (talk) 13:34, 17 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
"It was during this period that it was temporarily renamed the 1st British Armoured Division2 - you haven't mentioned its (apparent) earlier renaming, so probably worth adding that in
Added inEnigmaMcmxc (talk) 13:34, 17 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
"ceased to be an operation formation" - should that say "operational".....?
Yes, and correctedEnigmaMcmxc (talk) 13:34, 17 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
"During Evan's tenure" - apostrophe in wrong place
Moved to where it should beEnigmaMcmxc (talk) 13:34, 17 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
"the division mobilized" - UK subject so UK spelling should be used
UpdatedEnigmaMcmxc (talk) 13:34, 17 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
" Lumsden was wounded in action on 19 July 1942" - complete sentence so needs a full stop. Same with the one on the line below
Period added to this sentence, and also the one below (which I have just added some extra content to).EnigmaMcmxc (talk) 13:34, 17 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
"On 5 April 1943, the division was redesignated as the 1st British Armoured Division" - needs a full stop
Period added
Is it really necessary to put "acting commander" in the notes column when you have "acting" in the first column?
I was just thinking the same when I was relooking over the article, and now removed.EnigmaMcmxc (talk) 13:34, 17 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
That's what I got :-) -- ChrisTheDude (talk) 07:38, 17 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Thank you for your review and comments. I have attempted to action them all.EnigmaMcmxc (talk) 13:34, 17 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Support -- ChrisTheDude (talk) 13:54, 17 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Comments edit

Playfair et all (2004b) is not used and should be removed.
Support

Hawkeye7 (discuss) 01:45, 21 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for your review, comment, and support. I have removed the excess book.EnigmaMcmxc (talk) 15:17, 21 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Accessibility review (MOS:DTAB) edit

Tables need row scopes on the "primary" column for each row, which in combination with column scopes lets screen reader software accurately determine and read out the headers for each cell of a data table. For some reason, for the "primary" cell of each column, you have an empty scope instead of a rowscope; e.g. !scope=align="center" should be !scope=row align="center". --Pres N 19:48, 7 July 2022 (UTC)[reply]

I updated per the above, although it ignored the code to center the text. I entered a semi-colon between the two and that has factored in the center aligned text again. Not sure if that impacts the accessibility part. Are you able to take a look and establish if the change has worked?EnigmaMcmxc (talk) 08:58, 8 July 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Comments by Z1720 edit

No concerns about the lede.
Image check: pass
Source check: Version reviewed. One concern: Why does Ref 1 say "The Divisional System" instead of a page number?

Those are my comments. Please ping when the above is answered. Z1720 (talk) 17:02, 6 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]

@@Z1720: Thank you for the review and the above comments. This particular work I was unable to obtain a physical or e-copy so had to rely on Google Books and a version that did not include the page numbers. As a result, I was forced to cite the chapter instead.EnigmaMcmxc (talk) 03:39, 8 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Support. For ref 1, I tried to find another copy of the book with page numbers but was unsuccessful. It'll just have to be left as it is. Z1720 (talk) 13:35, 8 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Promoting. --Pres N 13:52, 14 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]

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